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"The Time Capsule" by Lurlene McDaniel is a very interesting and attention grabbing book. It shows the story of a set of twins, Adam and Ally who live in Florida. They are very similar except for one thing. At a young age Adam was diagnosed with leukemia. He got out of the hospital and said that he never wanted to put his family through that trouble again. He vowed he would never return to the hospital, and that he just wanted to live a 'normal' life from now on. Now, almost ten years later, only a few people besides their family knows of Adam's condition. Tessa, Ally's best pal knows about Adam's condition, but still loves him, even though Adam has a girlfriend, Kelly. Kelly, eventually finds out about Adam. Sawyer, Ally's boyfriend also mildly knows about Adams condition. Lastly, Adams best pal Wade knows about Adams condition. Although, some of these people prove to be not so loyal to Adam in the long run. Not many of the characters like Kelly. Adam does, Adams parents are okay with her, and Wade is okay with her. Ally doesn't like her because she feels Adam shouldn't be with a 'Preppy little miss Thing' and it also hurts her that Adam is not with her best pal. Sawyer dislikes her more that likes her because Ally does not really like her. And Tessa basically hates her because she has a feeling that she will hurt Adam. Little did they no that Adam was hiding something that was hurting himself. Adam and Ally went through a lot together. One main conflict in the book was their parents fighting. Ally was really worried at this point in the book because she went out to dinner after debate practice with her friends, and saw her dad sitting at a table with another lady. She was so shocked, that she said she lost her apatite and she headed home. While she was home, she found a picture of the family at disney, when they were little. She ran into Adam's room and told him that they should do that. He said that he didn't want to be close his parents because of their constant fighting. So ally decided that they would each take a couple of friends, it was just a matter of getting the money. Ally's mom, being busy with the upcoming election, said that she was to busy to go to disney, and slammed her office door. Ally's dad being busy with work said he couldn't go. Ally knew her dad couldn't resist her pleads, not because she was spoiled, but because she was a good debater. Finally after a minute or two, he gave in and said to take his credit card. Ally rushed up to tell Adam, and they started planning. On the trip was Wade, Kelly, Tessa, Adam, and Ally. Kelly's mom and dad didn't want her staying in Adams room so she had to stay with Tessa and Ally. The six hour steer to Disney was fun, and as soon as the got to the hotel rooms, they ran out to go to the parks. The first ride was space mountain, but after one ride Kelly felt sick so there was a coin toss to look who would stay with her. It was flipped that Wade would stay with her while the others were on space mountain. Tessa sat next to Adam, of course. After space mountain, they every went back to the hotel and there was a luau in the indoor pool. Adam came down in a black spandex suit, much to the confusion to others. He said that he said he forgot his swimsuit. After the luau, and mini pool party they every went to snooze. The second day they went to the animal kingdom and spent the day there. Ally woke up early the day the had to leave and she snuck down to the pool to watch the sunrise. Adam was there and they sat and talked for a while, and when Ally asked him why he was still in his black suit even though Sawyer and Wade offered him a swimsuit he said "I won't be needing one" and walked back to receive ready. That day it was raining and they drove home. Ally went to the debate meet and they won and got victory ice cream. every of a sudden, Ally got a very bad pain and said that she needed to go home. She had a feeling something was wrong with Adam. When she got home there was a note saying to arrive to the hospital. When she got there she found out her worst fear; Adam had experienced a relapse in his leukemia. Adam was at Kelly's home when he fainted. Kelly was a wreck, and so was Ally. Ally had to work through school, and quit the debate team. One time when Ally visited Adam, he was looking out the window. When she asked what was wrong he showed her a note. Kelly had broken up with him because she 'couldn't handle sthe stress of his illness' Ally was infuriated. The annual 'Snow Ball' was coming up and Adam couldn't go, but he wanted Ally to go. Ally went with Sawyer and when she got there, she almost started a battle. Kelly's date was Wade. Adams "best pal". Ally saw Kelly in the bathroom, and she went in as well. When Kelly came out of the stall she turned ghost white, and apologized to Ally. Ally interrupted her and said that she "never deserved Adam, no one liked her they were every nice for Adams sake, and over to have fun with Wade". Ally wen

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